Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behavior. Others say that amount of time spent watching television influences their behavior.
Nowadays tv plays a major role in our life. It is considered by some people that types of a program can affect reality which they watch on the tv. thriller they can get more aggressive and rude.
kids
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for an
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it can harm their brain as well as a
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kids
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types of programs are more dangerous for them.Correct your spelling
these
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