Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behavior. Others say that amount of time spent watching television influences their behavior.

Nowadays tv plays a major role in our life. It is considered by some people that types of a program can affect
kids
' behaviour.While others believe that amount of
time
plays more role in their behaviour.Before arriving at my position both the sides of
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will be analyzed
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children get attracted by characters.To answer it,
kids
are unmatured they do not know what is real and what it reel.They think everything is
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reality which they watch on the tv.
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,The survey revealed by America that after watching
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Harry porter every
kids
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get attached
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this
movie like eating
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foods, wearing
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cloths
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as well as
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dialogue
.Another one is, if
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watch
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thriller
film
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films
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on a daily, it can
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affect
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effect
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affect
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on
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their
a
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daily life.Regarding
this
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they can get more aggressive and rude.
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,the data was
cocluded
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concluded
by London that 70% of
kids
are aggressive in recent
time
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film
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films
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.
On the other hand
,some think a
time
can
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them.It can
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them if they watch the tv
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unlimited
time
it can harm their brain as well as
a
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mental health.To explain it, the
kids
watch the television for 5 hours without rest they will lost in the reel world they think they are in the movie.
Also
, it can damage their eyes and heart.
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has found that if children see television for more than five hours,do not behave like normally in
such
situations. In conclusion, it is true that
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of
time
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period
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can damage
the
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children in
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way
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.I believe that
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types of programs are more dangerous for them.
As a
result
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these
sireas
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series
areas
or movies can make aggressive and rude them in normal life.
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