You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child Write a letter to the parents.In your letter •explain why you would like the job •give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. •say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter in response to the advertisement published on March 31, 2022, in the Australian times. I moved here in August 2021 and pursuing my master’s in early childhood care at the local university. I have been a part-time babysitter in the city orphanage house for one year.

This

is a golden chance for me because it will provide me with a chance to expand my work experience. In my home country, I used to look after my brother since he is 4 years because my parents had to go to work. I really enjoyed it and thought to make babysitting my career and did two years diploma in nanny.

Therefore

,my job experience, as well as theoretical knowledge, makes me suitable for the position. I have morning classes and work in a restaurant only on weekends. For the rest of my time, I spend my leisure time in the nearest park where I teach some homeless children. Please give my regards to the family. I am looking forward to receiving your positive response to the letter. Yours faithfully, Sukhwinder

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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