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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays
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children
towant
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to want
 learn foreign
languages
, now modern society's
languages
 are interesting and again modern
languages
 are hard, even though
children
 want to learn different
languages
 at primary
schools
.
Firstly
,
children
 are 12 years older not any problem but than younger
children
 for modern
languages
 or language hardly, because their parents need use right time. Some
children
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the same time play differently gameplay
however
 your son or girl has to learn something that situation your
children
 are stressed because they are young yet. ,
,
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Secondly
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 a lot of people think that their childhood must study foreign
languages
, for ,example these days a lot of people want that their
children
 study the English language and they are neutral their sons or girls interesting. Parents themselves go to every day extra courses in foreign
languages
 with their
children
.
Thirdly
, at
last
 time majority population have chosen primary
schools
 than secondary
schools
this
 choice good when really wanted their
children
 that. Modern lifestyle primary
schools
 are very important and again beneficial for childhood. I agree if they are
children
's standards and interesting choice ,of course,
then
 for everyone being greatest and useful. Because I suggest all parents always interests their
children
's decisions and again health.
Then
 our life will be structured very well than before.
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