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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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children
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towant
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to want
 learn foreign
languages
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, now modern society's
languages
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 are interesting and again modern
languages
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 are hard, even though
children
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 want to learn different
languages
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 at primary
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.
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 are 12 years older not any problem but than younger
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 for modern
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 or language hardly, because their parents need use right time. Some
children
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the same time play differently gameplay
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 your son or girl has to learn something that situation your
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 are stressed because they are young yet. ,
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 a lot of people think that their childhood must study foreign
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, for ,example these days a lot of people want that their
children
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 study the English language and they are neutral their sons or girls interesting. Parents themselves go to every day extra courses in foreign
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 with their
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.
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, at
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 time majority population have chosen primary
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 than secondary
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 choice good when really wanted their
children
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 that. Modern lifestyle primary
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 are very important and again beneficial for childhood. I agree if they are
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's standards and interesting choice ,of course,
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 for everyone being greatest and useful. Because I suggest all parents always interests their
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's decisions and again health.
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 our life will be structured very well than before.

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