Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or nagative development?

Nowadays the way of thousands of
persons
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people
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interact with any other has changed because of
technology
. In many different ways
the
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technology
effect
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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humans
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human's
humans'
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relationships
. They are
many
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much
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positive and
nagative
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negative
progress
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seen
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in
this
essay. Some peoples use
technology
in a positive way for communication.
For example
in any human goes on the road and at that
time
suddenly his car tyre was
punchured
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punctured
punched
so the
next
moment he called his friend and easily communicate with his friend and tell him is
problem
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a problem
the problem
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so that's the
postive
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positive
impact of the
technology
and affected our
relationships
. In
added
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addition
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some types of
emergency
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emergencies
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came
in
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into
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your life only
technology
helped you at that
time
.
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example
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you lived in a small town and your father was a farmer and your father's fitness was not good he is very ill due to
COVID
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the COVID
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situation. At that
time
you called number 108 emergency ambulance van came
in
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to
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your current location and helped and save
us
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your
father
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father's
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life so that's the main reason our
technology
positive impact on
this
generation and
help
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helps
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to
bulid
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build
our
relationships
. There are several
nagative
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negative
effect
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effects
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on
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of
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our
technology
.you are easily distracted
with
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by
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the
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relationships
because
your
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of your
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bad
habbits
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habits
.For
a
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an
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example you are a belong to a
middle class
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middle-class
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family so you are working person all the
days
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day
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but the weekend
time
spend out with your family but
this
current generation is using a
smart phone
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smartphone
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in
a
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your
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free
time
using
a
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apply
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social media platforms ,videos ,
movie
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movies
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, Using on their phone so can not
bulid
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build
s
relation
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relationship
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with
his
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their
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family so it's a very
nagtive
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negative
impact
for
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on
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our
technology
.
Technology
is not connected to anyone so
also
a preset a physically but not mentally present that's why
technology
affected our
relationships
.
Furthermore
, you belong to a working person so
also
hesitate with
this
technology
because in working
time
only using
this
Technology
after finish your job go to your house you are
also
frustrated so you
are go
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are going
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to the bed not a spend
time
with your family, friends and colleagues in
this
way
technology
effect
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affect
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our
relationships
.
Thus
, in
a
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the
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current
time
many positive
point
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points
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and
nagative
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negative
point
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points
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of our
technology
so I can personally suggest
all
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to all
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the people if possible
spend
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to spend
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time
with your family and
bulid
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build
up your
relationships
.
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