Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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technology has enabled some of the

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and education system to scale back and

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an off campus system.

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presenting some negative side effects I believe it to be a positive change. In terms of positive

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, one of the main advantages of working or studying from home is the affordability as the

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could be utilized for the advancement of the place or respent on workers or students increasing motivation and loyalty .

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or school decreases transit time making the day more

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it is easy to not listen or commit when at home away from the right

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for it) so does the mental well being

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kids are lacking in social skills later in life. In

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when compared to the advantages

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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