Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in world. Other say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The people are divided into two parts,one who opines that economic
growth
is the main point to decline in the poverty rate and another are those who think that these developments should
be stop
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because it destroying the environment,so badly. But according to
me
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both views have their own importance, we
can-not
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stop the
development
because
this
is our need but we
also
have to think about
the
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nature too. Both
the
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sides are discussed in the following paragraphs.
First
of
all
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if we talk about
the
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economic
development
,
this
is
the
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part of our needing cycle. The economy of the
country
is a far wide concept
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than
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our thinking. To illustrate, it includes GDP,
infrustructure
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infrastructure
,
employments
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employment
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,
foreign
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exchange. All these factors
combinelly
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combine
combined
, make
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economic structure of a
country
. Economic
growth
means
increasing
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rate in GDP,
development
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and development
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opportunities, all
these
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components decide the per capita income of the
country
. So if a
country
wants to reduce the poverty
in
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between its
boundry
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boundary
lines,
then
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economic
development
will be on the top Apart from
this
,if we look at the darker side of
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economic
growth
, all the things which are created by
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humans
,
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has
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its
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own advantages and drawbacks. As mentioned above the main components of the economy,GDP rates ,
employment
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rate will increase by
satteling
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settling
setting
new industries,which is the main cause of the pollution. The industries harming the air , water, soil and many other natural resources. For
infrustructure
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infrastructure
development
, people cutting
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trees, destroying the
cultivative
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cultivated
cultivation
lands and buses,
trains
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are affecting the air,
also
producing
the
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noise pollution. In the end, a
country
can not survive without economic
growth
, but it
also
can-not live for a long time, by
exploting
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exploiting
exploring
their
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own natural resources. So there must be a balanced
development
,by taking full consideration of the natural environment.
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