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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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The existence of life on other
planets
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 is
one
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 of the main questions for
society
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.
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, people in power are spent each year billions of dollars for exploring the cosmos.
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, some people think that
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 is redundant spending for
society
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. In my perspective, exploring or voyaging
space
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 are beneficial expenses, because they will be reduced war between the countries and masked a more peaceful world. Human being reason about their own existence and ask themself “are we the only contemplative creature in the whole universe?” it is
one
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 of the reasons why humans allocate lots of money to answer the question. Because the answer replies to lots of philosophical, theological, and oncological problems.
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, if
society
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 can communicate with extraterrestrials, it would possibly learn new things from them. Other
planets
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 are attracted to governments of different types of energy and mineral recourses.
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, they are not accessible for now but thanks to the development of
space
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 technologies they can be reachable. So, voyaging other
planets
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 is
one
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 of the obligations because recurses of Erath are limited, and increasing energy-demanding instigate humanity to find new energy recuses. Scientists are looking at several features of
planets
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, they have a solid surface, having liquated water and a livable atmosphere are the main requirements.
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 of humanity's most pressing concerns is the existence of life in other worlds.
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, billions of dollars are spent each year by powerful individuals on
space
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 exploration. Some people,
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, believe that
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 is an unnecessary investment for
society
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. Exploring or voyaging into
space
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, in my opinion, are worthwhile expenditures since they will lessen violence between countries and build a more peaceful world.
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