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describe about the number of activities among teenagers

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The given bar chart describes the activities and the
number
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 of
hours
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 spent by the adolescents a
week
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 in Chester from 2002 to 2007. Overall, it is clear that watching television is the most common
activity
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 during the five years whereas bowling is the least favourite
activity
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. The weekly
hours
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 for DVD watching increased gradually from above
ten
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hours
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 in 2002 to almost twenty
hours
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 in 2007 per
week
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.
However
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, it decreased significantly in the year 2005 from above fifteen
hours
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 to
ten
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hours
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 per
week
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 in 2007. For the
activity
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 of doing sport, the
number
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 of
hours
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 is decreased gradually from
ten
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hours
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 in 2002 to around seven
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2005.
However
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 for doing
this
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activity
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 decreased significantly in 2005 to below five
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2007. For teenagers who to pubs increased dramatically from above
ten
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hours
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 in 2006 to almost twenty
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2007
On the other hand
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, the favourite
activity
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 among the youth is watching television whereas bowling is the
activity
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 with the low
number
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 of favourites among the youth. The teenagers spend twenty-five
hours
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 a
week
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 watching television in 2002 and 2003.
However
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,
this
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number
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 rises dramatically from thirty
hours
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 to thirty-five
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2004 and 2005.
Then
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,
this
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number
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 rises gradually from above thirty-five
hours
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 to almost forty
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2006 and 2007. Meanwhile, bowling as the least favourite
activity
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 has a low
number
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 of
hours
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 from below five
hours
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 in 2002 to almost none per
week
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 in 2007.

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