Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays many people have
opportunity
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to use modern
technology
.
They
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ability
feels
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themself
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more sociable, but
another
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in another
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part humans have opposite views. If we look
for
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at
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first
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part
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of peoples
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peoples
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people
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so we can see they always use
a
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technology
in their life.
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modern
technology
generation
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generations
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meeting
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of
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a group and
exchanging
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information on items.
Also
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anothe
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another
note
and the
motive is the desire to find something special. There are
the
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people who live with
technology
to develop their social life. They can buy cheaply and expect to be able to sell at a profit. So
second
part peoples prefer more activities life without any
technology
.
Ofcourse
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Of course
it doesn't mean they never use
technology
in
routin
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routine
day
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. In
fact
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they think using
technology
all time
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making
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makes
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their
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them
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unable and
menthal
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mental
menthol
cachexia. In my
opinion
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both views have
advantage
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and disadvantages, some moments you can find
a benefits
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benefits
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another time
menthal
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mental
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improving.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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