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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays many people have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to use modern
technology
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.
They
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Their
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 ability
feels
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feel
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themself
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apply
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more sociable, but
another
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in another
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 part humans have opposite views.
Body paragraph 1
If we look
for
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at
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Linking Words
first
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the first
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 part
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of peoples
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peoples
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people
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 so we can see they always use
a
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apply
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technology
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 in their life.
Many
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Much
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 modern
technology
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generation
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generations
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meeting
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meet
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of
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in
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 a group and
exchanging
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exchange
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 information on items.
Linking Words
Also
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anothe
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another
note
and the
 motive is the desire to find something special. There are
the
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apply
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people who live with
technology
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 to develop their social life. They can buy cheaply and expect to be able to sell at a profit.
Body paragraph 2
So
second
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 part peoples prefer more activities life without any
technology
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.
Ofcourse
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Of course
 it doesn't mean they never use
technology
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 in
routin
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routine
day
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days
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. In
fact
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,fact
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 they think using
technology
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all time
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all-time
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making
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makes
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their
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them
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 unable and
menthal
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mental
menthol
 cachexia.
Conclusion
In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 both views have
advantage
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advantages
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 and disadvantages, some moments you can find
a benefits
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benefits
a benefit
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 another time
menthal
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mental
menthol
 improving.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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