People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

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These days, the amount of advertisements that people see is growing. And it is believed that commercials have

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impact on us. I do admit

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negative effects, but the positive effects are truly more.

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today

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the most advertising platform is the social network called Instagram,

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popular

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bloggers tout things or other people daily and thousands and even millions can see them. Because

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individuals mostly follow bloggers whom there are interested in,

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most

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ads

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the ads

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are useful for them. The app automatically pushes and shows posts of things depending on

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persons

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history of researches or other posts

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likes, thanks to that everyone can find an item they were looking for without wasting a lot of energy.

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, there

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quarantee

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guarantee

that every commercial is useful for individuals. There can be a promotion of not good item,

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people being interested can go buying that and will waste of their money.

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, bloggers

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glamorize some

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and they can even not

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try its service,

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clients who come to

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can face

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bad service and make their health worse. In conclusion, individuals cannot run from commercials, they will face

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them even though

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bad or good. Mostly they benefit from it, but there can be situations when advertisements

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negative effect.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

228 words

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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

Fully explain your ideas

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