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some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days the design of urban areas has become of significance.
This
 has caused some people to think that it is better to plant
trees
 in towns than to put up houses in empty areas.
This
 essay will moderately agree with
this
 idea and believe that planting them reduces air pollution and prevents overpopulation in urbanized operations.
Firstly
, growing
trees
 in big cities would help in
reduction
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 of inhaling polluted air,
this
 is because
trees
 are naturally created in a way that they are able to suck up some biohazard gases in the atmosphere
thus
 providing more fresh air.
For instance
, most states in the world that rarely complain about toxic atmospheric gases have
trees
 in most spaces which
therefore
reduce
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on
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this
 problem .
This
 is why planting greenery in urban range
insignificant
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.
Furthermore
,prioritizing plants like
trees
 in central states
assist
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 in
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reduction
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 of overcrowding of
such
 places.
This
 is because there are no buildings for people to reside
.
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For example
, the least crowded cities in most parts of the globe have much of their spaces occupied by
trees
 which
also
then
 contributes to
to
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the
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 beauty of them. It is for
this
 reason that
prioritization
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 of growing
trees
 in big cities is significant. Even though
trees
 are important it is nice to see a lot of infrastructure in a big city because not only does it provide accommodation for all but the appearance of these places looks modern and up to standardization of what fascinates tourists. In conclusion, I argue that it's better to grow
trees
 in open spaces of contemporary
space
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 so as to reduce exposure to
hazardous
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the hazardous
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 breeze and lower overpopulating big states in a nation.
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