As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society?

Due to the development of society, a significant
number
of people prefer to live alone or have a nuclear family. There are certain reasons
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why they want
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such
trend, and there are some influences
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should be taken into consideration.
To begin
with, it is generally acknowledged by certain
individuals
that having a big
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family
unit causes a financial
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. As the
number
of
population
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over the world
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increased, they suffer from a lack of
acommodation
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accommodation
, thereby leading to the increment of price of houses.
Therefore
,
individuals
have chosen to live alone or with a small
number
of family members to rent a small house which is cheaper than a big one.
For example
, a survey conducted by the Korean Labour Foundation has revealed that almost 20% of young adults have a
tendancy
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tendency
to live alone or with their
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spouses
without kids since they cannot deal with priceless houses. As the example clearly illustrates,
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house fee is a key factor in having a nuclear family.
However
, there are some problems
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released from
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such
trend.
Firstly
, as the
number
of couples decreases, birth rates
also
go down.
Therefore
, the population of young adults is smaller than that of seniors.
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that each young adult supports almost three seniors.
Hence
, it is reasonable to point out that it is stressful among
younsters
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youngsters
.
Moreover
, some
individuals
who live alone might be neglected. Not only
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small
number
families
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or living alone hard to be helped, but it may
also
bring about devasting consequences
such
as an emergency. In
this
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, in Korea, some
individuals
die alone
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and are found a few days later which sounds miserable. In conclusion, as
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matter of the fact that many
individuals
tend to live alone or with
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number
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contemporary society, the birth rates increasingly decrease and some are neglected in an emergency situation.
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