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‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

#‘the #internet #course #books #schools #prediction
Now a days
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 the
use
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internet
 as a pool of knowledge is more common
then
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 ever but some still believe
this
 will never take the place of course
books
 in the educational system. I
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disagree
 with
this
 notion and will explain why in
this
 essay. In regards to the internet, in
this
 day in
age
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 the
internat
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internet
 has become
ubiquites
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ubiquitous
 (ubiquitous) we can
use
 it through our PC's or
essier
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easier
 (easier) via the phone making it the fastest most accessible tool for students.
In other
words
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 a student could study when and wherever he
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chose
chooses
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choses
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chooses
) like on the bus or train
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without
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with out
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without
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 the need to rifle through the pages.
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furthermore
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furthermore
)
while
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, while information in textbooks is given on an acdamic level information online,
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information
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the information
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 in textbooks is given on an
acdamic
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academic
 level information online could be
writein
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write-in
 (written) in all levels or depths
thus
caitering
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catering
 (catering) to the needs of
every one
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. To
iilustaite
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illustrate
 (illustrate), A sick person trying to educate
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himself
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him self
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himself
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 on he's issue could find info written in a way he could understand . Concerning course
books
, As the utility of technology
increses
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increases
 (increases) and the price decreases
books
 have been experi (experiencing) the reverse trend.
In other words
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that is
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books
 have a
single
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use
 which
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usually
 has an
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expiration
 date while the
internat
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internet
 will always be in
use
thus
 students will be more willing to spend money on it.
For example
, buying a "Grey's
anatomy
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" book is very
epensive
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expensive
 and will be
usefull
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useful
 for the medical student only for anatomy class. Additantly (
additionally
)
sylubus
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syllabus
 (syllabus)
books
 are
extremaly
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extremely
 (extremely) big and heavy. Take
for
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 example, a student with a full day in school brings food,water,change of clothes etc' there is no room for said
books
. In
counclusion
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conclusion
, I believe the
internat's
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internet's
 physical accessibility and the option to cater
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different
diffrent
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 levels of users will with no doubt replace the expensive and heavy course
books
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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