Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

Education
is a vital tool for survival in
this
life. It is
impotant
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important
that it should be made accessible to
everyone
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their social class. Because without
education
there is a possibility that you can miss a vast number of opportunities. So it
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that it should be made free at all levels. In my personal opinion
education
is
also
, not limited to
academic
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but to different types of learning, depending
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cultural and religious beliefs. In
this
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I present the positive effects of making learning free and accessible to
everyone
despite their background.
Education
brings equality. So, if every person can access free learning,
then
they are able to access equal opportunities, but if it's limited to a certain group of
people
because they can afford it, the nation is in trouble, because they might end up producing a higher number of criminals. Most
people
from poor
background
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can not afford
education
and it is the government,s duty to have a budget for free
education
. Not providing free
education
will
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also
cause those children with parents who can not afford to turn into the streets and become involved in drugs, stealing and many other unlawful acts because they are not doing anything productive for their age.
Hence
I say that
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there should be no charges for any kind of learning in all socio classes and on all levels. Making
everyone
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pay for learning, puts a
dermacation
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demarcation
between the rich and the poor, whereas
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the olden days when there was no academic learning and institutions, young
people
would have a few days in a week, in which they would gather around and the older wise
people
of a particular clan or village that would teach them about life and would share the wisdom on how to survive in
this
life. In some African countries where
people
do not have access to academic
education
because of various reasons, they still practice the same method of learning,
hence
I mentioned in my introduction that learning is not only limited to
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. And in
those kind
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set ups
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, that kind of learning is accessible to
everyone
,
also
people
are taught in different age groups. In conclusion, I am of opinion that
education
should be made free and accessible to
everyone
despite their economic class.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • primary school
  • tertiary education
  • free education
  • fundamental right
  • social mobility
  • economic mobility
  • reduce inequality
  • financial barriers
  • educational opportunities
  • government funding
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