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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on more important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Having a healthy eating habit is fundamental to our development, especially for young children.
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, there has been an argument about whether
students
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 should be taught about
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 science and how to prepare it.
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 I fully support
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 idea, others think
students
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 should put more focus on important subjects. On the one hand, each subject included in the curriculum is of a specific magnitude to our mindset and
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 innovation. All
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 have full access to every critical issue will reinforce their good grasp of many practical fields in their formative years.
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, biology helps explore nature and wilderness; science makes them creative and open-minded. Meanwhile, mathematics constructs a sense of sensibility and agility. Nextly, the young will have a chance to learn and gradually imagine who and what they want to be in the future through their
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 subjects.
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, the study of
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 science, in my opinion, plays a vital role in nurturing good health.
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, children often consume a considerable amount of junk
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, even under the supervision of their parents, due to the lack of nutrition knowledge. That explains how helpful the teaching of
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 study is to our kids; it would be a practical approach to keeping
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 detrimental to health out of their reach.
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, they can build up a better immune system thanks to a balanced diet.
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,
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 can be more independent in homemade
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 preparation.
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, as children know what to prepare and how to make a dish, they can quickly cook a simple, still nutritious one without any support from the adult. In conclusion, I believe the study of
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 is as necessary as other subjects. Good nutrition indeed leads to better acquisition of knowledge.
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,
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 should learn how to develop themselves physically and mentally at a young age.
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