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The maps show two different plans designed for a conference room.

The maps show two different plans designed for a conference room.
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The given
two
plans
 are designed for a conference
room
 by
two
 different blueprints.
Overall
,
they
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it
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 can be
oserved
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observed
served
 that
two
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the two
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 designs have really the same infracture for the
room
 but the arrangement in
two
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the two
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 designs
are
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is
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 quite different. We can see that
plan
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Plan
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B
 doesn't have
podium
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a podium
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 like
plan
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Plan
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 A and there are
also
 more chairs
than
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apply
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in
plan
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Plan
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B
 than
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in plan
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plan
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Plan
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 A. The first similarity
of
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between
show examples
two
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the two
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 planes is the entrance of the conference
room
 in the upper right
corner
. The
working-positions
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working positions
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 are arranged in a quite similar U-shape
faced
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facing
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 upward. The whiteboard of
two
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the two
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 designs is upper and middle.
However
, in
plan
 A it is slightly nearer the entrance than in
plan
B
 and in the
B
 outline it has a seat and a table for
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the presentator
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presentator
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presenter
. There are
also
 some
difference
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differences
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 between the
two
 diagrams. The seats for workers of
the
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apply
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plan
 A faced inward and there are just chairs
in
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on
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one
 side of the long
tables
 really different from
the
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apply
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plan
B
 which have seats
in
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on
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two
 side of the worktables. The morning tea
of
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in
show examples
plan
 A is in the middle at the lower edge but in
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design,
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design
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Design
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B
 is at the northwest
corner
 edge of the
room
 and the style of morning tea in
two
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the two
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plans
 is
also
 different. In
plan
 A there is a podium for the
presentator
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presentation
 at
northwest
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the northwest
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corner
, near the whiteboard. Quang Minh Phạm Quang Minh Dạ vâng ạ Tranng Phuonng Tranng The given blueprints
two
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are two
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 different
plans
 designed for a conference
room
. The first similarity between
two
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the two
show examples
plans
 is in
ít
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the
 entrace which is
on
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in
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 the top right-hand
corner
 of the
room
. In
plan
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Plan
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 A’s
design
,
while
 morning tea is served at the back of the
room
 behind the
tables
, it can be found in
one
corner
 of the
room
 in the layout in
plan
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Plan
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B
.
Addition
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In addition
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, there is
one
white board
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whiteboard
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 placed in front of the
tables
together with
presenter’s
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the presenter’s
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 chair in
plan
 A’s
design
.
Besides
, in
plan
B
, it has
one
white board
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whiteboard
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puts
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put
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 behind the chair of the presenter. It can be seen that three
tables
 of
plan
 A are placed next to each other in the middle of the
room
 forming U-shaped. It can
see
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be seen
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 easily that the capacity of
room
B
 is more than A. In
plan
 A’s
design
, the direction of the person sitting is inward.
Podium’s
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The podium’s
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 position in
plan
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Plan
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 A is in the left
corner
pf
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of
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 the
room
 next to
thw
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the
 whiteboard,
while
 there is no podium in
plan
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Plan
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B
’s
design
.
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