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City planners’ new designs include setting up schools, markets and commercial places (like offices) in different areas of the city. Do you think it will help the city dwellers? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Various designs have been proposed by the
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stake holders
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 of the municipal corporation urban planning committee, where new educational institutes, market places and commercial buildings will be built for the economic growth and infrastructure development of the
city
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Proposed
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 plan has
bring
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the
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 new wave of excitement among the residents of the
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 and nearby areas.
World class
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 educational campus with a capacity to host 8000 students from kinder garden to post-graduation will be built.
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 campus will not only provide affordable modern education but
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 create a professional sports facility for the
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. It reminds me of
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 experience while studying at IIM-Indore, where apart from studies,
campus
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the campus
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 was used by professional swimmers and runners to practice for national and international tournaments.
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opening
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of
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markets and commercial places will provide a
business friendly
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 environment and create employment opportunities. Local youth and women will get jobs, resulting in
economic
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the economic
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 growth of the
city
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.
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, it will bring investment in the start-ups and stop the brain drain among the technology and engineering professionals.
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 build Financial Technology Centre in Gandhinagar has brought ample opportunities for fintech professionals, creating a market space for
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next generation
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 companies serving in cryptocurrencies and
block-chain
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blockchain
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 technology. If the
city
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 will receive state-of-art infrastructural development, it will be
huge
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 leap of faith by the government in transforming the old
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 into a smart
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.
City
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 dwellers will no more travel to nearby cities for purchasing various
good
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 or
experiencing
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 better quality services. A planned town can bring ease of living for its citizens,
example
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of
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Chandigarh, a union territory between Haryana and Punjab is known to the nation.
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