thw two pie charts show online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
The given two pie charts depict the
selling
of five distinct goods in the markets in Canada from 2005 to 2010.
After Replace the word
sales
analyzing
it can be seen clearly that the sale of electronics & Replace the word
analysis
appliance
were 35% which was highly purchased of these gadgets in Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
the
2005, but it experienced Change the article
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decline
with Add an article
a decline
the
5% margin after 5 years. Correct article usage
a
In contrast
, shopkeepers sold 18% video
games in the former Change preposition
of video
year
, and they gained popularity in the latter year
, reached at
23%. Remove the preposition
apply
However
, one-fifth home
furnishings had been bought by Change preposition
of home
the
Canadian citizen in the initial Correct article usage
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year
.
Further
pie charts collate that the percentage of food & beverage sales was 22% and 32% in 2005 and 2010. Apart from
this
, more than one in ten home furnishings were afforded by the
individuals in Correct article usage
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the
Canada and it was the least famous choice in the Correct article usage
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last
year
.
Overall
, maximum marketing of electronics & appliance had witnessed in the first year
, while
same goods came on
the Change preposition
in
second
position for selling in the second
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year
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