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Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why

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In our modern time,
education
 is the most important and
also
 includes a college
education
. From some people’s perspective, they reckon that
students
 who are not good at studying are not necessary join the university. From my point of view, I totally agree that all people should obtain the opportunity to access the
education
 institute.
This
 essay will be discussed. There are many reasons why higher
education
 should be available for all
students
.
Firstly
, the most important thing is that bad
students
 do not mean they can not
study
 well. And
also
 if they allow only good
pupils
that is
 not fair for other people who want to join the university
such
 as the
students
 who
study
 well but used to have bad grades when they were studying at high school and if they are not allowed to attend an academy that can lead to lack of qualified personnel.
Secondly
, not only good
students
 can follow the curriculum of higher-level
education
 but
students
 who have determination are
also
 able to make it at a slower pace.
For example
,
pupils
 who have a strong passion to
study
 to follow their dream can try to
study
 hard until they gain a good result.
On the other hand
, good
students
 can improve their academic results easier.
First
 of all, good
pupils
 are able to learn well and it is easy for teachers.
Moreover
, teens can take part in major field proficiency and teachers allow
students
 to work on
study
 in detail. And
also
 it has high competition in their class but it will bring good results in the future as
students
 who are good at sciences will improve technology better.
As a result
, intelligent
pupils
 will help to create good outcomes. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that higher
education
 should be provided for all
students
,
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 because in the long-term perspective it will allow the building of a highly developed society.
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