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Many people are afraid to leave their home because of their fear of crime. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, but others feel that little can be done. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Over recent decades, there has been an increasing fear of
crime
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 in many countries.
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 some think that there is little that can be done to reduce the levels of
crime
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, I believe there are measures that can be implemented. Those that believe that nothing can be done hold
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 view for several reasons.
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, they think that a fear of
crime
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 is a state of mind perpetuated by the media.
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, we are constantly bombarded with negative news stories about
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 and violence on our streets.
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 the belief is that whatever we do to reduce levels of
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, people will still be scared. Another belief is that
crime
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 is caused by wider structural issues in society that are too difficult to tackle,
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 as the growing income gap between the rich and the poor. Little
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 can be done about
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 issue in our capitalist societies.
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, I feel that there are solutions that will ensure people feel safer outside their homes. Governments can increase the numbers of police in local communities and more ‘neighbourhood watch’ schemes should be encouraged, both of which increase safety and deter
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. The media should
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 be encouraged to present more positive stories in the news about how
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 is being tackled rather than the focus on the negative. In terms of the structural issues, governments should attempt to tackle issues of poverty through better income distribution. To conclude, there is a widely held view that nothing can be done to prevent
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.
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 to
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 opinion, I would argue that there are options available that would help prevent
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 and
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 reduce the fear of
crime
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.
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