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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverlkess. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweugh the disadvantages?

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Vehicles
 that don't require a driver are one of the most recent innovations known to mankind. In future most
vehicles
 won't require
someone
 to ride it, only the occupants will be passengers. In my ,opinion the advantages
don'tt
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don't
 outweigh the drawbacks due to the fact that
this
 type of vehicle is new and not widely used,and
also
 because its existence will contribute to unemployment in
the
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society. The main advantage of the use of
driverless
 cars has numerous positive sides. The
first
 is how it speaks class because it is a different type of car which is not everyone has seen, used or can afford.
For instance
, an individual who drives one is said to be seen as
someone
 rich and influential.
Also
, it doesn't require a driver so it is easy for
someone
 that cannot drive to manoeuvre their way around town without feeling disadvantaged because of their inability to drive . These are benefits why an individual will likely want to purchase a car that can drive itself.
On the other hand
, despite its ,advantage some believe its negative side is more profound.
For example
,these types of
vehicles
 are not commonly and widely used so they can pose
athreat
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a threat
 to an individual who is trying to use
it
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.
For instance
,
someone
 who is used to being driven by drivers,
such
 person will be scared to go on a trip with a
driverless
 car because they are frightened something might get wrong on the road. Moreso, it will contribute to unemployment in
the
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society. Driving is a profession and with the innovation of
driverless
 ,cars some people will be laid off from work.
For instance
,a cab company like Uber will likely sack most of their drivers if they were to introduce
driverless
 cars into
their
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 company. In conclusion,
although
 there are benefits to
driverless
vehicles
, they will pose more drawbacks
in
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the
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society at large.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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