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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#psychologists #stresses #life #period #time
Many famous
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therapist
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 across the world believe that pressure on
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 brain in
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day-to -day
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day-to-day
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 life is harmful, to overcome that individuals must have
time
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the time
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 of day without any work.I concur,that allocating a particular duration without any errands will definitely bring positive changes to the neurological disorders;at the same
time
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unambigioulsy
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unambiguously
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 brings overall betterment in physical health. In today's stressful world it is
neccessary
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necessary
 to focus on one's physical health and
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 wellness.Having a
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specially
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 during the evening
in
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a
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day,ignoring all the tensions of daily life will make the mind relax ,
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 body energy.
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,a survey has been conducted among medical students,
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 they keep themself
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,
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and motivated?results
shown
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 that around 60% of students rely on meditation by doing yoga in the early morning or using
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app
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 before
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.
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 they claim that
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anxiety during exams was at bay and they stay energetic for the whole day.
Moreover
, improved focus and energy
resulted
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 positive impact on one's physical health which can be considered
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the
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 great benefit.It is
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observed
 that
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practitioner
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practitioners
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 taking
quiet-time
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 observed more focus,calmness and good sleeping patterns.Here to exemplify
this
,people are opting for more yoga and meditation methods for
better
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 and healthy life.
On the other hand
,there is
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 of people who find themselves
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 while doing nothing.They believe,
keeping
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 themselves indulged in errands and other physical activities
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 them to overcome stress. I conclude that
however
, there are numerous options for keeping one's self relaxed by indulging in various things,but
i
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 believe using
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the quiet-time
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 method has more effective results
then
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 any else.
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