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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as squares and parks. Do You agree or disagree with it?

#towns #cities #spaces #squares #parks
Dear aunt Mary, How are you? I am overjoyed to receive your letter and to learn that you are planning to be a
space
 tourist. It is
such
 an exciting idea but I feel that you need to consider more about the advantages and disadvantages before you go. As you and I are probably aware , the
space
-travelling industry is a whole new industry and a new industry means more jobs for
people
. In
this
 way, by participating in
space
 travels, you are helping to create a new job market that can help more
people
 here on earth. Another thing about
space
 travel is that it allows you to get a new perspective on Earth: the perspective from above that you have never experienced before. Maybe
this
 change of view might help other
people
 to come up with new ideas about what we can do for our earth relating to climate change. Since
this
 is a serious problem all
people
 will be equally affected, including you and me. But unfortunately,
space
-travelling
also
 has its disadvantages. The
first
 thing is that
space
 tourism probably does more harm than good to the environment. Since the rockets will release a huge amount of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere,
therefore
 increasing the rate of climate change and global warming.
Furthermore
, I am
also
 a little
skeptical
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 about the safety of
space
 tourism. As you know, the technology of
space
 travelling is still new and unlike travelling with planes or trains, nobody knows what might happen. In the end, nobody can promise or guarantee anything for your safety. So I think you might want to think about the trip more. In my opinion,
although
 I can understand the interesting idea of travelling in
space
, I still think it is too early for you to go on a
space
 trip. But like I have said before, the technology is still new and safety is hard to guarantee when you are out there in the infinity of
space
. I hope my letter was not too long and please greet your family for me. Best regards
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