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Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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countries is
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invite
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countries
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all over the world to provide good
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improve
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knowledge
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help
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people
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their
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people
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countries
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improve
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