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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this?

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Many
people
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 believe that walking is the best activity but
people
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 these days were walking less and less. I believe the advancement of public transportation and
people
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's job preferences are the reason behind it.
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, I have the solution for
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problem
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 so
people
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 can live
healthy
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life
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. The
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problem
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 is public transport is evolving every year.
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, it makes
people
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's
life
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 easier to go to different places by doing so
people
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 tend to forget that by walking you doing
exercise
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 unconsciously.
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, in today's world, many
people
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 prefer to work as white-collar rather than blue-collar because
people
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 who do their work with strength are not appreciated enough.
People
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 who use strength for their
labor
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 need to realize that while doing their job, they simply do
exercise
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such
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 as lifting weight. The solution to
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problem
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 is we need to raise the salary of
people
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 who do their job with their bodies because they need strength to earn money. While for the other
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, I have a suggestion that
people
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 can buy a ticket for public transport by doing a simple
exercise
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.
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 idea has been implemented by the Russian government to make their
people
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 have a healthy
life
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. In Russia,
people
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 can get a free train ticket by doing squats or jumping jacks. In conclusion, we need to raise
people
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's awareness to do
exercise
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 that leads to a healthy
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, we can simply offer them solutions
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 as walking or cycling to go to their office.
People
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 who live healthily live longer than
people
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 who don't.
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