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Education should be accessible to people of all economic background all level of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#education #people #background #level #school
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modern
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education
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 has become
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major
majaor
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 part of humans life as well as
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incredible
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 role. According to some
individuals
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education
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 should be free for all
type
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types
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 of
people
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 from primary school to till higher
education
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. I have a
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partially
particular
 view regarding
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 statement which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with suitable examples. Beginning with the factors
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justify that why
why
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education
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 should be free for
people
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,
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, some level of
education
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provide
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 proper equality in society between
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humans
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. To explain it, with the help of
education
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 the mentality level will
be grow
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 among
people
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. Meanwhile,
education
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provide
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better
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 future, educated
people
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 easily better get job Opportunities with the help of
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 they can get sufficient income which
increase
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 the living standard of
people
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.
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, when
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education
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the education
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 will be free in society, so
people
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 can easily do study and provide
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 future .
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Japan,
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,
it
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is a top rank country from all countries
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 have
best
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 employees cause of free
education
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.
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,
for
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providing free
education
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 funds
are
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 too important. To explain it, if government provide free
education
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 they can not get income in future from study funds. Because facilities always
needs
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 funds which
is
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 important for
education
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 development.
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, if government organize free
education
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 it put
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a negative
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 impact on
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financial
finicial
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the finicial
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 budget.
Which
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 can make
positive
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 point of
low
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 economy of
country
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the country
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.
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, in Pakistan
they
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provide free
education
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 for their
people
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, so that's why
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the economy
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economy
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 level of Pakistan is low rather than
anothor
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another
other
 countries.
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, these are the negative outcomes which make them disagree regarding
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statemwnt
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statement
. To sum up,
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, there are
lot
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 of
benifits
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benefits
 regarding free
of
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cost
education
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but
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we can not ignore the drawbacks of free
education
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 which put
negative
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a negative
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 impact on
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the country
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country
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 economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic
  • skilled workforce
  • investment
  • prosperity
  • social mobility
  • financial barriers
  • welfare state
  • cycle of poverty
  • living standards
  • overcrowded
  • strained resources
  • quality of education
  • economic feasibility
  • reallocating budgets
  • sustainable
  • subsidized education
  • tuition fees
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