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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day.

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The illustration presents the design of a
park
 in 1980 and its current design. Overall, the pathway is more spread out and the grassland is more divided.
In addition
, there is an increase in possible activities and slight changes to the overall placement and design of the
park
. One of the most noticeable changes is how the path splits into 4 routes and enables a wider range of access to the
park
.The
park
 is
also
 no longer just 1 curved path and now forms a kind of central area where you can go to different parts of the
park
.
This
also
 divides the
park
 into more sections
such
 as a play area for kids.Not to mention, there is no longer a huge concrete wall surrounding the
park
 and the entrance gate has been removed. Some of the more minor changes include a seating area from around the pond which has been removed and a wider variety of trees and shrubs.
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