Some people believe that everyone has aright to university education and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have.

Universities
are the
culture
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evolution of
the
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society.
Therefore
, the institution of
university
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the university
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is responsible for
education
, research and technology. Certain individuals are of the opinion that
students
have the right to higher
education
and the
government
should allow free
education
for all
students
regardless of their financial position.l completely agree with
this
notion that the institution of
university
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the university
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should
enroll
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all learners for free to reduce
university
expenses and spread
education
. One of the major
reason
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why
government
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the government
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should accept free enrollment of
students
,
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is to decrease their financial burden. Because apart from
tution
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tuition
fees,they are required to pay rent, transport and food.
This
will result in
in
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an incredible increase in academic expenses.
For example
, about 80 per cent of
university
students
either from rich or poor families are working
part-time
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job
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to raise extra money to pay off
university
fees.By allowing free admission of
students
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universities
,the
government
is helping them financially.
Furthermore
, if
universities
admits
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all
students
at no cost, more people will be educated.
Then
, an educated society will mean higher knowledge of research and technology,
thus
, it will become easier for the
government
and citizens to understand and tackle problems affecting the nation.
For instance
,
university
student can use their scientific knowledge and technology from
university
to
develop
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vaccines in times of pandemics,in order to treat people.
Hence
, widespread
of
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free
university
education
benefit
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the nation. To conclude, despite conflicting views regarding free
education
in
universities
, I believe that
this
will give everyone an opportunity to
be learn
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and develop,
also
this
idea
provide
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more opportunities for authorities to fund
students
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fees. 260 words
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