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success is depend on hard work but others believe that luck has no role how far do you agree or disagree

#success #work #luck #role
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At the present time,
people
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 believe that only hardworking
people
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 will succeed and there's no place for
luck
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. I totally disagree with the rubric above due to the fact that
people
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 cannot earn money without
luck
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 and with no
luck
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people
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 won't be able to get a
job
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and
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it will be proven in the following essay.
Firstly
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, since the dawn of time
people
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 believed
to
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luck
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,
for example
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,
people
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 always carry some kind of talismans or chokers. In
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Ireland,
people
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 believe that green clover will bring them money and
luck
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. And the situation has not been changed at the present as well. You can hold a questionnaire and ask strangers "do they believe in
luck
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 or not?" I'm sure that 100% of
people
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 will say ‘yes’; because
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luck
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 is an inalienable part of the life of human beings.
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, without
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people
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 won't be able to get even a
job
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.
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, when
people
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 looking for a
job
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, they are searching them
on
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 newspapers and magazines and they don't know what expects
them
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of them
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 there, they only rely on
luck
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 and
trying
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 to find a suitable
job
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 for themselves.
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, even at
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school sometimes kids are getting their marks by
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, which means that teachers sometimes can mix up jobs and mark the student wrong. It's
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 a clear example of
luck
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.
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, if
people
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 will rely on only
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 they will not get anything, truly
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 is with us but it helps only when we work hard.
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, in difficult situations when
people
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 cannot make a choice between something, they are choosing only by their instincts and if they work hard and learn a lot, they know which decision to make, it all comes from experience. After analysing both sides of
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 issue, I have concluded that despite the hard work,
people
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 always need at least
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 grain of
luck
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 for the successful life
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