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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#rubbish #governments #amount
Thesedays
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, humans by progress in society make more rubbish. I believe exploring the cause of
this
 problem can
asist
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assist
 in finding suitable solutions to help resolve it. Increasing consumerism could partly account for producing innumerable trash. consumerism is one of the biggest
problem
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of
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 modern communities.
This
 issue
contribute
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 people to
buy
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buying
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 goods more than
that
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they need
therefore
 societies' interest to buy flawless things encourages companies to manufacture product in
excessive
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 way
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as a result
 more garbage is produced.
This
 situation is compounded by the fact that numerous men are unaware of
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the dangerous
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dangerous
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 that will be made by
these trash
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.
For example
, many people around the world use plastic bags to carry things
to
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somewhere and
then
 waste it easily. They do not think about
the
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plastic is a threat to
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environment and
environmentand
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the environmentand
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 recycling
them
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can take ages( about 400 years).
This
 issue of making excessive trash should be addressed
from
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 governments. From an environmental perspective, raising
awarness
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awareness
 about
the
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waste production plays a vital role in having
safe
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 planet in the future. If people and
goverments
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governments
government
 cooperated together, the situation would improve
in addition
other
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 effective solution is for
indivitual
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individual
individuals
 to prevent
yourself
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themselves
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 to buy extra
stuffs
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stuff
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aslo
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also
 by repairing the ruined goods can reduce producing rubbish. To conclude, even though consumerism and
unawarness
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unawareness
awareness
 contribute to
make
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 waste. The government can remedy the situation. In my opinion, raising public knowledge and reuse of old things are steps in the right direction.
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