In recent years there has been a considerable rise in crime committed by young people in large cities. What has caused this? What solution can you suggest?

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rapidly

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youth

generations who live in large cities.

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some reason as well as some solution which I will discuss in

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the causes which produce

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
70Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

308 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In recent years there has been a considerable rise in crime committed by young people in large cities. What has caused this? What solution can you suggest?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

today ,most of people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger.is it a positive or negtaive development in your opinion?to what extent do you support the devlopment?

You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – describe the equipment – explain how it might be useful at your workplace – offer help in purchasing it

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