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Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Art
 has been around for many centuries and has sometimes been a central activity in society, and at other times been a secondary activity. It is heavily debated by some that
art
 is of the utmost importance in life while others state that
art
 should not play a significant role at all. In
this
 essay, I will highlight both perspectives and share my opinion that
art
 is important, but only becomes relevant after several other needs are fulfilled.
Art
 is essential for many
people
,
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 because it allows them to express themselves.
Besides
 artists, who built a professional
career
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 out of
art
,
also
 the general public is daily enjoying and creating
art
 by dancing, singing and enjoying hobbies. As an illustration, we can consider an individual who listens to music daily, enjoys good television series during the weekdays and goes to see live comedy
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 the weekend, while going to a bar afterwards to dance all the stress away. Many
people
 cannot imagine their lives without all these artful activities, thereby it can be concluded that
art
 is essential for them. While
art
 is a primary activity of many
people
 in
first
-world countries, in
third
-world countries the population is occupied with other
pasttimes
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pastimes
past times
. In many of these
places
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 the population struggles to find safety and
to
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feed themselves. When offered the choice between safety and food, or enjoying the arts, they would choose the former. In order to
survive
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 they cannot prioritise
art
, and thereby it is not essential. In my opinion,
art
 is a great way to express oneself.
Although
 I wish that everybody in the world can enjoy the arts to the fullest, I think we have to be open
for
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 the perspective that artful activities only become important when certain other needs have been met. In conclusion, while
art
 is important for some
,
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 when certain conditions are met, it is less important for others with competing priorities. I hope that in the future more and more
people
 have their basic needs satisfied and can enjoy the arts.
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