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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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During
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critical times, new forms of working
style
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 come up in society. Nowadays, self-employed has become a
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 choice for
people
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. Some
people
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 prefer to be self-employed than working for a
company
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 or organization. There are many reasons behind
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phenomenant
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phenomena
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 it could bring many conveniences, there are
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 disadvantages as well. The most important reason for
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 to choose to be self-employed is the freedom that it can bring.
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, when you are self-employed, you don't have to follow the various guidelines or rules set in the
company
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.
People
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 working in the
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 usually have to arrive in the
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 by 9am and finish work at 6pm, sometimes even longer. But when you are self-employed, you can arrange your
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 freely.
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 is
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 important for working mothers who need to spend some
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 taking care of
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 children.
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, you can
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 avoid the toxic working environment in the
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 when you are self-employed
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 since you don't have to see or even associate with the bossy
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 in the
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. A healthy and quiet working environment can benefit
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's
wellfare
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welfare
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 the conveniences that self-employed can bring, there are
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 drawbacks we can not ignore. Being a freelancer,
people
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 need to have
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good self-control
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because
 you will
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 motivation easily when nobody
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 you. I remember during the pandemic, I worked at home for a few months. It took
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longer
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time
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 for me to finish the same task at home
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it
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 used to in the
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,
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 because
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 got distracted easily without
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 working around.
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, when you are self-employed, you need to face the risks and challenges all by yourself. If you are employed in a
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, the
company
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 will offload some of the risks for you, since big
companys
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companies
 usually have more fundings or strategies to deal with risks and difficulties. In conclusion, choosing to be
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self-employed
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self-employe
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self-employed
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 or work in the
company
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 is all
personal
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a personal
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 decision. As a new form of working style, it has advantages and disadvantages at the same
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. We need to
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 our personal situations
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 before we make
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 decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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