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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

#success #wealth #belongings #measure #person
Accomplishment, to some
people
, is based on money and material things.
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 of
people
 believe that
success
 and personal achievements are linked to
wealth
. I believe that each person has their own definition of
success
 and on
this
 basis,
wealth
 cannot be taken as a reference to measure personal achievements or goals.
First
 of all, when we were children, we were told that getting good grades in school was imperative. We learned from a young age that a successful career is related to a good education. Society made us competitive and encouraged us to be better than our friends.
This
 competitiveness was nurtured in school. A recent study revealed most university students chose their
career
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careers
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 based on their future earning potential.
Therefore
, to them,
wealth
 is a result of
success
.
For example
, in Spain, by far students prefer to study business
instead
 of science.
Secondly
, social media has the ability to influence the way
success
 is measured. Social media influencers can have content
which
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 is based on a luxury lifestyle. They show a fantasy life
that is
 unachievable for most
people
.
For example
, Instagram is filled with accounts of
people
 that portray how wonderful their life is.
This
 creates an instantaneous duality of thought between frustration and ambition. Personal
success
 is independent and different to each person. I believe that what makes a successful person is based on their own goals. To me,
wealth
 is not the best way to measure
success
 in life. As far as I am concerned
success
 is my family, my job, and my friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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