Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

It is considered that nowadays adult
people
tend to live a life without any physical practice and it causes several problems for their health. The reasons and methods for
this
trend will be elaborated
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in
this
essay. It is possibly said that
this
issue may be caused by some main factors.
Firstly
, it is simply because
people
don’t have enough awareness about doing exercise and they think
this
activity's main purpose is just to keep fit .
For instance
, my aunt said that she does not have to work out regularly because she does not demand to lose or gain weight.
In addition
, some
people
avoid going to the gym because of the high cost of membership fees in gym centres.
Therefore
,
instead
of taking money for
this
activity, officers tend to come back home and relax freely in their own houses.
Besides
, most
people
are intrigued by mobile phones or video games and they allocate all their free time to them. To tackle the problem, several solutions may be offered.
First
of all, the government should make some attempt to promote the importance of doing exercise, how it is associated with our health.
For example
, there are a lot of programs about health that are broadcasted on VTV - the Vietnamese national television channel to help raise
people
's awareness about physical practices.
Moreover
, the gym centre owner would consider the more affordable prices, and the local council can build some free facilities for working out in public parks. Ultimately, the bad consequences of games or phone addiction should be more emphasized. In conclusion,
although
there are a lot of repercussions that
this
trend caused, some measures could be done soon to tackle it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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