Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

It is considered that nowadays adult

people

tend to live a life without any physical practice and it causes several problems for their health. The reasons and methods for

this

trend will be elaborated

clearly

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this

essay. It is possibly said that

this

issue may be caused by some main factors.

Firstly

, it is simply because

people

don’t have enough awareness about doing exercise and they think

this

activity's main purpose is just to keep fit .

For instance

, my aunt said that she does not have to work out regularly because she does not demand to lose or gain weight.

In addition

, some

people

avoid going to the gym because of the high cost of membership fees in gym centres.

Therefore

instead

of taking money for

this

activity, officers tend to come back home and relax freely in their own houses.

Besides

, most

people

are intrigued by mobile phones or video games and they allocate all their free time to them. To tackle the problem, several solutions may be offered.

First

of all, the government should make some attempt to promote the importance of doing exercise, how it is associated with our health.

For example

, there are a lot of programs about health that are broadcasted on VTV - the Vietnamese national television channel to help raise

people

's awareness about physical practices.

Moreover

, the gym centre owner would consider the more affordable prices, and the local council can build some free facilities for working out in public parks. Ultimately, the bad consequences of games or phone addiction should be more emphasized. In conclusion,

although

there are a lot of repercussions that

this

trend caused, some measures could be done soon to tackle it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

285 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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