In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree.

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higher authorities make some strict
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,
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like smoking is prohibited in public
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instructions to people,
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they want to smoke, they should leave the particular area or building. I accord with
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it in the forthcoming paragraph. To initiate, smoking in the public put
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detrimental effect on the
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passive smokers, a
person
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near the smoker.
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is doing their work together and one
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started exhaling nicotine
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persons same as the
person
who is exhaling it. It will create lung infection and low immunity level, which has
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effects on
health
.
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public places or allowed in some
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building,
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if
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to smoke or face
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of
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it
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he or she can enable nicotine by sitting
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particular area.
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smoker
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person
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not face any kind of
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issues, which are happened due to
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of nicotine.
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, children try the same things, which are done by people in front of them like smoking. To sum up, smoking should be prohibited in
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public
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children to do it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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