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Some people think that air travel should be restricted because it cause serious pollution and use up the world fuel resources.to what extent to do agree or disagree

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It is often urged that flights should be put to limit to reduce pollution and uses a lot of oil.To a lesser extent, disagree that flights should be put to a limit.
Air
 travel is a mode of
transport
. Nowadays because technology improvement ,people are travelling by
air
.
This
 is because it is a fast mode of
transport
 and it saves time.
Air
 travelling is the only mode of
transport
 that can be used to travel when you are travelling to other continents .Through technological advancement ,gases from
from
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the flight can be reduced depending
to
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changethat
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 oil they use.They can use
a
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fuel
which
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 is friendly to the environment.
On the other hand
, I agree to a greater extent
that
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than
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air
 travel should be limited because it causes
air
 pollution .The emissions of gases from flights are absorbed by the atmosphere and it causes Global warming .It causes diseases,drought ,water scarcity and extreme heat.
This
 threatens
a
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human life.More diseases are created because of
air
 pollution
for
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 example, respiratory illness .Extreme heat is
also
 an impact of
the
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climate change,heat damages crops ,creates diseases and reduces water sources by evaporation.
In contrast
 , they use a lot of fuel resources because it travels long distances. In my opinion ,I think ai
transport
 should be put to a limit because they cause
air
 infection and it is harmful to people's health and to the environment.
However
, it
bring
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 income to the country's economy. In conclusion,departure should be limited to reduce infection and
to
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save the world's fuel resources.

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