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People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

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Nowaday
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, many
people
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 who live in the cities are facing numerous problems in daily life
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 as
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, living space and traffic. To start with, many
people
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 live in the cities due to the chance of occupation and quality of life,
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 there are drawbacks in many ways. The rise of
population
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affect
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 the conditions of air as
people
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 are using vehicles and resources which pollute the community.
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, New Delhi(
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 city of India),is one of the worst air quality in the world despite the lack of space and increasing of
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.
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, all of these affect the physical
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 of
people
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 in general because of the air and community that are suitable for
people
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 to live in.
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, to solve these problems are necessary for the government to take part. The improvement of some areas rather than the capital or tourist visit province should receive enhancements as
people
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 are able to live there. The decreasing number of
people
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 in the cluster can improve several living conditions
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 because
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 reduction of traffic as well as the abundance of resources
which
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 are enough for the community.
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, if the government can improve smaller regions, it would enhance several lives to have
better
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a better
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place
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places
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 to live. In conclusion,in my opinion,I think that every region of the country should
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 in order for
people
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 to live in as it can improve living quality and satisfaction among the population.
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,
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 would have a good life with
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excellent
health
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.
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