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some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hardwork and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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This
 essay talks about the beliefs of people about being successful in a
sport
. There is always a debate on the key factors of
success
one
 is natural
ability
 and the other is the
ability
 to
work
 hard and doing
practice
 as much as possible. Let us discuss more in detail
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the two opinions
one
 by
one
.
Firstly
, I would like to discuss hard
work
 and
practice
. These are the important aspects of
success
 because nobody knows anything by birth. We start learning as we grow older so even though you don't have any natural
ability
 to get
success
 in the
sport
 you can achieve it with your hard
work
. As we are all well aware of the saying
practice
 makes a man perfect, with
the
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continuous effort we can learn anything gradually.
Firstly
, I would like to discuss hard
work
 and
practice
. These are the important aspects of
success
 because nobody knows anything by birth. We start learning as we grow older so even though you don't have any natural
ability
 to get
success
 in the
sport
 you can achieve it with your hard
work
. As we are all well aware of the saying
practice
 makes a man perfect, with
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
continuous effort we can learn anything gradually.
Although
 hard
work
 and
practice
 play a key role in our
success
, if we had a natural
ability
 to perform well in the
sport
 It would be a great advantage. So when choosing a
sport
 to play we could give our priority to the
one
 where we can give our best naturally. I would like to conclude
this
 essay with my opinion of hard
work
 and
practice
 play a major role in
success
.
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