In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Recently, smoking in public areas is restricted in numerous countries. While some
people
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about the strict rule, some cheer for the regulation and find it is fair
this
way. I personally agree with the latter to a great
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.
First
of all, it is undoubtedly that smoking does damages to human
bodies
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. Not only the ones who actively
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consume
cigarettes
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but
also
other
people
in the surroundings that passively
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in the smoke would be affected.
Although
people
who smoke on purpose might be aware
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its negative effects, and willing to pay the price for several minutes of relaxation and enjoyment, it is extremely unfair, to force others in the room to take in the toxic air spontaneously.
Therefore
, smoking in public places, especially in a closed space,
such
as an office or a studio, is
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potential harm to other
people
's health.
In addition
,
although
cigarettes might be attractive to some, the smell of the smoke is
unplaesent
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unpleasant
, even repulsive, for some others. Once the smell
get
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absorbed by hair, clothing, or other textiles, it could
stays
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for a whole day long and it is hard to get rid of it. For
people
who are not a fan of cigarettes and cigars,
this
is a nightmare. In conclusion,
somiking
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smoking
soaking
in public
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not only hurt other
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people's
physical health
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but
also
their mental state.
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I think it is fair that public smoking was made illegal in some countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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