Honey from honey bees manufacturing write entire process and steps of honey collected from honey bees.

The process diagram describes the natural production of honey from the
bees
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the process has about 6 stages ,starting from when the
bees
construct their hive, to when the honey for consumption is made.
To begin
with, in collaborative efforts, the
bees
build their hive which
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usually hexagonal in shape and
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closely packed together, after that, they set out to search for flowers that
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their desired nectar, which on finding it, extract those nectars and deposits it into the hives to form cells.
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, through the to and fro movements of the wings of the
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while resting on the hives,
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is blown into all the cells in the hives,
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, when the cells are exposed to the sun, the water content evaporates leaving a remnant which turns out to be the honey that
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ready for use and
thereafter
packed in various jars.
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