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In the past when students pursued a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#students #university #study #country #opportunities #development
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 days,
students
 were pursuing a graduate degree in their native place.
However
, in present days pupils have a lot of opportunities to
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pursue
 in
foreign
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 nation. In
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 I will discuss both positive and negative aspects of development.
To begin
,
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 advantage of studying in abroad is that
students
 will get advanced knowledge.
However
, the information they acquire keeps them up to date and makes a better citizen in
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feild
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field
 of study.
In addition
, it brings
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satisfaction
 for their life.
Secondly
, the pupil
acquire
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handful
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 of practical skills. It enhances the area where they are gifted and drives
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 to their
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 life. On other hand, there are
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 downsides
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 studying abroad.
Home sick
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 is one of the major
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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students
 face. Especially,
reminiscjng
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reminiscing
 the
evey
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every
 day
walk
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 with parents, siblings, make them
to
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feel alone and sometimes leads to depression and anxiety. Another difficulty they face is language barriers. Communication is
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 art to express
thoughts
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 and opinions of
students
. Inability to explain and
to
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share leads to lower
self confidence
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. In conclusion, studying in foreign places has its own merits and
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demerits
. Graduating in a new atmosphere with various costumes might inculcate new things and
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better
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a better
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 citizen. On
contrary
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this
 may
also
 affect the
students
seperated
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separated
 from their loved ones.
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  • International job market
  • Cultural exposure
  • Intercultural communication
  • Higher education standards
  • Specialized programs
  • Language proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Mental health challenges
  • Recognition of qualifications
  • Bureaucratic challenges
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