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With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern times, education plays an important role in young people’s life.
Also
,
students
 have to achieve in an academy. Some are of the view, some
subjects
not
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are not
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 necessary to teach in school. From my point of view, I suppose that non-academic
subjects
 are crucial for
students
.
This
 essay will discuss both statements as follows. There are many reasons why
subjects
 like physical education and cookery should be
teached
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taught
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 in academy institutions.
First
 of all,
students
 can learn a skill that helps them in daily life. Cooking classes have many benefits to assist people to cook food.
Also
, cooking skills are able to help
students
 when they want to do part-time jobs during the term
ending
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.
Secondly
, children should participate in some
activity
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 to relax themselves from stress. Physical education is the best way to relieve stress.
On the other hand
, academic
subjects
 are essential to
learn
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 because
students
 have to use knowledge about those
subjects
 for admission to the university. If they can not study well that will make them get a low score in the exam.
Moreover
, eliminating unnecessary
subjects
 will help
students
 concentrate more on their
subject
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subjects
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. As an illustration, some
students
 have to study for a long time to understand the lesson, so if they go to learn necessary
subjects
 they will have no time for study. In conclusion, non-academic
subjects
 make
students
 waste their time studying.
However
, I completely agree that
students
 have to learn non-academic
subjects
 at school because they have to learn other skills to take care
themself
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 when they grow up.
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