children as a young as eight own a mobile phone nowadays. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

It is widespread that many teenagers have smartphones. I do not think that
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youngsters.
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such
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than 3 or 4 hours can affect
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brain significantly.
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related to
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studies
are extremely
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for
young
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generation, especially for school
children
whose age are at 8.
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phone
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day they would be more
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, without any energy to play outdoor games
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health problems.
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, dedicating much time to using
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phone
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can be harmful
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children
's creativity,
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to solve simple tasks.
For instance
, my nephew,
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unfortunately
, has used
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iPhone
iphone
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for 3 years and,
as a result
, he is one of the worst pupils at school.
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, there are
also
some merits of using
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device. It can be used as a helpful item for
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study
. If
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are being
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taught
how to manipulate it in the right way they could find beneficial materials.
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, in the age of
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smart devices
and the Internet,
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child
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knew
know
about
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early
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.
This
knowledge should be
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controlled
by parents. As well as
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, via the Internet
children
can gain extremely important information for study In conclusion, I totally disagree with
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that
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the benefits
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of owning
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mobile
phones by
children
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outweigh
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the disadvantages
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.
However
, it can be used
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appropriately
when there is a parent's control.
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