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n many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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 , youngsters are On fleek obesity and Deleterious . Many individuals believe that the authority should have Liability.Actually , I am partially Acknowledge
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immensity good level of fast food like burgers pizza, shakes and many more others.According to the Health expertise department
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worldwide having body overweight problem
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overweight and unhealthy Diet .
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 , whatever the reason is they should do mandatory subject related heath and foods in the universities , colleges and schools
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 more they should ban street food places from the cities and town
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, the governments should allow only the healthy stuffed on the street that would encourage the children to have healthy. To summarize my all ideas , both parents and government should take initiative for their kids and upcoming nations to stay healthy and eat great.
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