The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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days, in several
countries
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many
people
are seeking a
job
that
earning
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earns
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a huge
amount
of
salary
because of their inflation, for
this
reason
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I strongly agree with
high
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a high
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salary
. So it has
positive
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effect
in
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people
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quality of life,
improve
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themselves and spend time with their family.   One important reason for
this
opinion is that when
people
are earning a huge
amount
of
salary
they can spend
money
for
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their quality of life. When
people
find a high
salary
job
, they can pay for their essential needs
such
as shelter and
foods
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food
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. If they do not have enough
salary
, they cannot spend for renting shelter or buying
foods
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food
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or clothes.
For example
, in some
countries
that are
in
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under sanction price of essential
need
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needs
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is getting high so it is better for
people
to have
high
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a high
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salary
job
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jobs
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to pay for essential things.
Therefore
, finding a
job
with earning a huge
amount
of
salary
is a wise decision for many
people
in these
countries
.   Another important reason for
this
opinion is that when
people
are earning a huge
amount
of
salary
they can save
money
after a while can to invest it in many methods
such
as
stock
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the stock
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market, beginning a new business and improve themselves without any worried about
money
. When some
people
could not be earning a huge
amount
of
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salary
they could not be saving
money
and improve themselves because they spend
money
for
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on
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their essential needs.
Due to
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, finding a
job
with
high
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a high
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salary
is
reasonable
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a reasonable
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decision for many
people
especially
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,especially
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younger
people
.  
However
, some
people
believe that having a high
salary
job
is not valuable and
chance
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the chance
a chance
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of promotion, gaining new professional experiences are more important but I believe that having a
job
with earning a huge
amount
of
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apply
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salary
is more important because they can save
money
and spend it for their entertainments
such
as going to trip, buying modern house or car.
Then
, finding a
job
with
high
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a high
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salary
it
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apply
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sounds great.   In conclusion, in several
countries
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many
people
believe that having a
job
with
high
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a high
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salary
is
important
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more important
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than other conditions because they can spend
money
for
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on
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their essential needs or invest
money
and improve their life or spend
money
for
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on
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their
entertainments
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entertainment
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. So I strongly agree with
this
statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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