Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening). Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
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Governments must monitor suspicious activity relating to the safety of the nation. Linking Words
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disturb the harmony of a community by aggregating plans to do so, it is necessary to keep a check on Correct pronoun usage
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, if they knew they were being monitored, they would never break these laws in the first place.
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, tracking an innocent individual would make him paranoid, so it is necessary to have evidence before anyone tries to intrude on somebody else's Linking Words
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, the advantages of tracking through cell phones and Linking Words
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task response
The essay addresses the advantages and disadvantages of using technology to monitor people effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are strong, providing a clear outline of the essay's content.
task response
The essay effectively discusses the necessity of monitoring suspicious activities for the safety of the nation and provides relevant examples to support the arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure throughout, with a well-organized introduction and conclusion that enhance the coherence of the essay.
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