Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening). Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
The
right
to privacy
is a topic that has been discussed for a long time in every aspect of an individual's life. Through technology, some opine that this
right
is being taken away by the governments by adhering to monitoring every activity that a person does, without them even realizing it. Through this
essay, I would like to address the advantages and disadvantages of such
a practice.
Governments must monitor suspicious activity relating to the safety of the nation. This
is done by cell phone tracking and placing security
cameras
at places where such
activities are prone to happen. For instance
, if there are people
that
disturb the harmony of a community by aggregating plans to do so, it is necessary to keep a check on Correct pronoun usage
who
such
individuals and catch them red-handed. In addition
, terrorist activities can only be stopped if the authorities know about the whereabouts of such
people
, without them knowing that they are being monitored as it would be effective because if these people
know that they are being tracked, they would start destroying the evidence that would subsequently
help in a proper judicial trial. Furthermore
, installing security
cameras
at traffic signals is a good way to catch people
that break the traffic laws, these cameras
can send photographs of such
individuals and make them pay the fine. However
, if they knew they were being monitored, they would never break these laws in the first place.
On the contrary
, it is essential to adhere to monitoring people
at appropriate places, and not where it is not an absolute necessity. For instance
, installing security
cameras
in trial rooms in a mall is worthy of condemnation as it completely goes against moral values and destroys the right
to privacy
. Moreover
, tracking an innocent individual would make him paranoid, so it is necessary to have evidence before anyone tries to intrude on somebody else's privacy
.
To sum up
, the advantages of tracking through cell phones and security
cameras
is a healthy practice as long as people
who are involved in doing so are noble and have moral ethics that adhere to the task at hand, and not merely gratifying
their own personal perverted needs. It is essential to keep a check on Wrong verb form
gratify
people
at only appropriate places, as the right
to privacy
is everybody's fundamental right
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task response
The essay addresses the advantages and disadvantages of using technology to monitor people effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are strong, providing a clear outline of the essay's content.
task response
The essay effectively discusses the necessity of monitoring suspicious activities for the safety of the nation and provides relevant examples to support the arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure throughout, with a well-organized introduction and conclusion that enhance the coherence of the essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.