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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks

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Tourism
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The tourism
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 industry is one of the key factors in a
country
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's GDP. A lot of businesses have revenue from
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 that bring their money to their destination.
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 they bring money to the
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, the aspect of pollution and harm to the
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spots
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 they make is concerning. Let’s consider Turkey.
Tourism
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 industry is Turkey's primary source of income. Millions of
tourists
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 visit popular cities like Istanbul or Antalya yearly and spend a lot of money during their visit.
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, there are a bunch of cafes in downtown Istanbul that are overloaded with
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. If there are no
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 there, their revenue will collapse
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 20% of their average. Another advantage that
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 bring to a
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 is their culture. The culture itself will nurture when diversified cultures
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 up together.
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, residents can learn about new cultures from
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 when they interact with them.
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,
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 can overpopulate cities that are already crowded.
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, there is always traffic in Paris city
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, no matter what the time is and for residents it is annoying. Another disadvantage is the harm that they do to the
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spots
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.
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spots
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 are the places that we should care about.
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, I saw a child that threw water into Persepolis Cylinders. A cylinder that was made from mud from 2000 BC.
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 it was not destroyed, but it was damaged. In conclusion, while the tourism industry is a crucial part of a
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's economy, it comes at a price of overpopulation and pollution and harm to
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heritage
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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