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Marketing and promotion is key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree?

Marketing has always played an important role for businesses to maximize their profit.
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 I am aware of the importance of that, I believe there are other crucial factors for success
as well as
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 marketing. On the one hand,
that is
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 a vital factor for a
business
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. People will not be aware of a
product
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 or a service if there is not a proper and inefficient advertisement. They should comprehend the utility of a
product
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 and how they can buy that to promote
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revenue.
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, if a marketing plan is not planned thoroughly, the
business
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 will be in danger of bankruptcy.
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, the importance of marketing and promotion should not be neglected. the marketing team need to know psychology to find out the ways
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encouragement
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people to pay for the
product
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 or the service they offer,
otherwise
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, the sales rate will not increase.
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, there are several factors other than marketing that are important for a
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 to succeed.
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, it does not matter how the performance of the marketing team is perfect as long as the
product
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 is low-quality. People may pay once for a
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due to
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 the advertisements but, it is the excellence of the goods that causes more income.
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, users often suggest a high-quality dress to their friends which results in an increment in revenue for that company.
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, It is really important to identify the needs of the population. To illustrate, if the majority do not wear a specific type of dress, they would not pay for that even though it is produced with the best fabrics.
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, a
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 will not succeed if there is not enough demand. In conclusion, it seems to me that,
although
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 marketing and promotion are crucial for a career to succeed, there are
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 other factors
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 as quality and demands.

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Ensure that the introduction clearly states the writer's position on the extent to which marketing is key to a successful business. The conclusion should summarise the main points and opinion.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen the arguments and make the essay more convincing. Make sure each paragraph is focused on a single main idea related to the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visibility
  • Market recognition
  • Digital marketing
  • Social media
  • Search Engine Optimization (SEO)
  • Online advertising
  • Consumer behavior
  • Brand loyalty
  • Purchasing decisions
  • Brand identity
  • Ethical concerns
  • Financial burden
  • Innovation
  • Saturated market
  • Customer engagement
  • Traditional vs. modern marketing
  • Market trends
  • Feedback analysis
  • Adaptability
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