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- Describe the gift - Why you chose the gift - Explain on how you plan to deliver the gift.

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I trust you are happy about moving to a new home and I am writing to let you know about the present we got for your house. Your wife spoke to Mira and confirmed that you have white and black in your living. So we thought we should bring a present to match your living room. The present is
beautiful
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a beautiful
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 modern looking standing
lamp
 of 7 feet. It is
steel
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a steel
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 base and the shade for 3 bulbs is black and white with crystals. Actually, Mira wanted to buy something for
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 but we loved
this
lamp
 we saw at Mictree and decided to buy
this
. Since the piece is from
as is
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as-is
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 section and was discounted, we did not get
in
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it in
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original
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the original
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 box, so we will bring the assembled
lamp
 in my truck on Wednesday. I am sure you both are going to
happy
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be happy
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 with
this
lamp
 and remember us always. Again, congratulations
for
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on
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 the new house and god bless you all. Yours loving,
Submitted by Toni R on

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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